Black Ghost

In the magical forest where animals could talk and play, Paddy, The friendly rabbit, hopped around with his friends. His friend’s names were Spot, the Ground Hog and Tweet, the ...

Der Liederbuch The end will be so sweet with no pages left to turn, and no breaths left to breathe. I’ll walk into the grave, sans regret or parody, close ...

My advice would be to study actual books so you can get a better understanding of how stories are developed. Because in truth, what you have here is very bare, ...

Hi! Before I critique, I'd like to say welcome! I hope you find YWS to be everything you'd hope for in a writing site. If you every have any questions, ...

Hello! A bit of fantastical creature fighting in a forest? Cool stuff. ^_^ In the brief momen of quiet, Just a little type there, I think you forgot a letter. ...

First of all, I thought this was hauntingly beautiful. All the imagery, the surrealness of it all. Really, you captured the mood of this entire piece perfectly. I only found ...

I thought it was pretty humorous in some parts, although I didn't really care for the way that you spoke directly to the reader. I say this because you didn't ...

Just a few typo stuff... onwards ; cursing each of the cars that drove past and sprayed her with icy slush-water. I think you need a comma instead of a ...

Yes, I agree. Some phrases like "already preoccupied" just seemed too long to have any natural flow with the rest of the poem. Also, I though the way you punctuated ...

Hi! Interesting story you've got here. Although I admit it was a little confusing, you've got quite a bit of drama built up to start. :P She slipped down the ...

If you focus on the darkness outside your definite ring of light, Your trying to makes something surreal with this piece. By adding a technical term like the word definite, ...

I really enjoyed this. :D It was one of those pieces that I just couldn't stop reading until the end. As far as criticism goes, I have mostly none. All ...

I would consider adding some breaks between the different parts. I don't know if its just me, but I was really confused the first time through. I thought one second ...

Hey there! I tried to read this, but honestly, there are much to much punctation, spelling, and grammar errors. I woke up to the feel warmth. I woke up to ...

Kylan! Despite previous comments, I actually found this quite engaging. I thought the italicised portion served its purpose by establishing the tone and overall feel of the rest of the ...